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I forgive you by ~DeepPurpleTears:iconDeepPurpleTears:

Categories Literature > Poetry > General Poetry > Fixed


I tried to reach out and grab your hand
But I couldn’t extend it far enough
I felt your pain and offered comfort
When I knew your times were rough

You helped me too when I was down
When there seemed to be no way out
When I fell you helped me get back up
And pushed away my doubts

But now I fear
You’ve fallen away
My words upon deaf ears
Please hold on
Just one more day
For you I’ve cried these tears

My heart is trying to keep up its hope
But the doubts are now returning
With no way of knowing what has happened
This fear within me keeps churning

You asked if I would forgive you
If you took your pain away
Of course, I would never condemn you
If you thought it was the only way

So now I fear
You’ve fallen away
My words upon deaf ears
Please hold on
Just one more day
‘Cause I’m still waiting here

…I forgive you…now and always...
©2005-2009 ~DeepPurpleTears
:icondeeppurpletears:

Author's Comments

i want to cry right now. i don't know what to do. so i thought i would write a poem. don't be too harsh in your criticism please...although it is appreciated.

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~BlessingUnaccounted4 Sep 11, 2005, 4:28:54 PM
:hug: whatever it is thats going on in your life right now, i hope things get better. and im sorry i have no criticism to add to this poem. if you need any help or advice just send me a note. im always here. :hug:

--
So that is how I learned the lesson that everyones alone.
And your eyes must do some raining if you are ever gonna grow.
But when crying don't help and you can't compose yourself.
It is best to compose a poem, an honest verse of longing or simple song
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~CruelestCut Sep 11, 2005, 4:57:08 PM
Milla....is this...is this for me? is this...your way....is this... *tears* yes, actual tears....i....i feel so selfish... "You asked if I would forgive you If you took your pain away Of course, I would never condemn you If you thought it was the only way" is this...is this saying it's okay?.....i've written a poem for you...i want you to read it.....

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:jsenn::blackrose:~ I play for keeps. Go ahead, win my soul. ~:blackrose::jsenn:

~ Some cuts are just too cruel...~

~ Jeg er Asher og jeg elsker min Linda. <3
:icondeeppurpletears:
~DeepPurpleTears Sep 11, 2005, 6:37:04 PM
thanks. i might hit you up on that offer sometime actually. :hug: criticism is a bonus...just knowing that you read my poem makes a difference to me. so thanks.

--
our life is what our thoughts make it

i am; therefore, i think
:icondeeppurpletears:
~DeepPurpleTears Sep 11, 2005, 6:39:49 PM
yeah, i made it for you. i didn't know if you were okay. i had to let it all out. i would hate to lose you and i would never wish for you to leave like that...but i would forgive you. :hug: don't feel selfish though...you're not. you were in a time of need, and everyone has those moments. i offered to help and will always be here to help you. don't feel selfish. :hug:

--
our life is what our thoughts make it

i am; therefore, i think
:iconblessingunaccounted4:
~BlessingUnaccounted4 Sep 12, 2005, 1:25:47 PM
of course i read your poems! why wouldnt i? lol :hug: ill try my best to criticize when you need it. :salute:

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So that is how I learned the lesson that everyones alone.
And your eyes must do some raining if you are ever gonna grow.
But when crying don't help and you can't compose yourself.
It is best to compose a poem, an honest verse of longing or simple song
:iconcruelestcut:
~CruelestCut Sep 12, 2005, 3:14:06 PM
:hug: :glomp: :hug: thanx you. i feel a lot better. i'm trying to be more positive.

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:jsenn::blackrose:~ I play for keeps. Go ahead, win my soul. ~:blackrose::jsenn:

~ Some cuts are just too cruel...~

~ Jeg er Asher og jeg elsker min Linda. <3
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~Bug-Id Sep 12, 2005, 7:03:33 PM
So sad!!! :hug: for you!!! and a :glomp: too!!! Hope you feel better!!!

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I am the ICE CREAM BUG!! ( I bite you and you crave Ice cream!! :evillaugh: )
:icondeeppurpletears:
~DeepPurpleTears Sep 12, 2005, 7:38:23 PM
it is sad. :( but everything's a lot better now. thanks so much! :hug:

--
our life is what our thoughts make it

i am; therefore, i think
:iconendallia:
~Endallia Sep 13, 2005, 3:33:58 PM
i love the end

--
"As I was killing time waiting for the killer to come and kill me"
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